Into the Woods
Twisted and wrinkled trees surrounded my shadowed face. Sinister glares shot at me like bullets. The gentle breeze brushed against my frozen skin, giving my bone cheek a tickle. The stars above shone beautifully like a Goddess disguised as the night. The scent of mouldy mushrooms filled the air like toxic fumes. Shadows crept around leaving no trace yet a sign. Suddenly a sturdy voice left me frozen on the spot, echoes bounced off the old trees and into my ears which sent a shiver down my spine. A shock travelled through my body like lightning that had struck my bones, I was scared out of my wits. It felt as if I were paralysed until the voices vanished in my head and I knew there was nothing there but me. The forest fell into silence, all that was heard was the relief in my breath and the trees rustling around. I felt stunned, startled but satisfied as well.
4 comments:
You use such rich vocabulary Luisa! It is great to see that you have thought of so many adjectives and language features, but remember not to overuse these features: they are more powerful when they stand out from the rest of the text :)
Thank you for the feed back. Next time I will make sure that I use my language features carefully.
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